The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the monthly differences in average costs of three metals: copper,
nickel
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, and zinc in 2014. At
first
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glance at the line graph, the
nickel
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reached its peak
on
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in
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January,
while
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it hit the lowest point
on
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in
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June. Another noticeable feature, all of the costs
remaind
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remain
remained
stable from June until December, and
then
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they decreased.
To begin
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with, during the
first
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half of that year, the
prieces
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prices
of the
nickel
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and the copper showed a downward,
while
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the
zink
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's line was
flactuating
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fluctuating
.
In addition
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, the
nickel
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's
priece
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price
piece
was the highest during the
first
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two months only, and
then
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it
continousuly
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continuously
dipped.
Also
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,
on
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in
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February, the
zink
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and the
nickel
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equalled the same cost.
Besides
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that, the only growth
happened
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that happened
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was in the
zink
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's
priece
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price
piece
, which was during the
first
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month of that year.
Moreover
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, during the second half, all of the
prieces
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prices
pieces
showed a fluctuation,
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first
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first,
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they increased, and
then
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they
remaind
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remained
remain
remind
constant, after that, they decreased.
Additionally
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,
on
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in
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October, the
nickel
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's and
zink
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's prices increased, but the
nickel
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's increase was more than the
another metal
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other metals
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.
Finally
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,
on
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in
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December, the
nickel
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remained stable,
while
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the other metals increased.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, first, zink with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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