The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates the monthly differences in average costs of three metals: copper,
nickel
, and zinc in 2014.
At Use synonyms
first
glance at the line graph, the Use synonyms
nickel
reached its peak Use synonyms
on
January, Change preposition
in
while
it hit the lowest point Linking Words
on
June. Another noticeable feature, all of the costs Change preposition
in
remaind
stable from June until December, and Correct your spelling
remain
remained
then
they decreased.
Linking Words
To begin
with, during the Linking Words
first
half of that year, the Use synonyms
prieces
of the Correct your spelling
prices
nickel
and the copper showed a downward, Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
zink
's line was Use synonyms
flactuating
. Correct your spelling
fluctuating
In addition
, the Linking Words
nickel
's Use synonyms
priece
was the highest during the Correct your spelling
price
piece
first
two months only, and Use synonyms
then
it Linking Words
continousuly
dipped. Correct your spelling
continuously
Also
, Linking Words
on
February, the Change preposition
in
zink
and the Use synonyms
nickel
equalled the same cost. Use synonyms
Besides
that, the only growth Linking Words
happened
was in the Correct pronoun usage
that happened
zink
's Use synonyms
priece
, which was during the Correct your spelling
price
piece
first
month of that year.
Use synonyms
Moreover
, during the second half, all of the Linking Words
prieces
showed a fluctuation, Correct your spelling
prices
pieces
Use synonyms
first
they increased, and Add a comma
first,
then
they Linking Words
remaind
constant, after that, they decreased. Correct your spelling
remained
remain
remind
Additionally
, Linking Words
on
October, the Change preposition
in
nickel
's and Use synonyms
zink
's prices increased, but the Use synonyms
nickel
's increase was more than the Use synonyms
another metal
. Fix the agreement mistake
other metals
Finally
, Linking Words
on
December, the Change preposition
in
nickel
remained stable, Use synonyms
while
the other metals increased.Linking Words
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, first, zink with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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