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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates data which compares the present and future proportions of the urban population between 1970 and 2040 in four distinctive Asian nations: the
Philippines
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, Malaysia,
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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.
Overall
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, the two countries have experienced exponential growth in their respective quantity of people (Malaysia and
Indonesia
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),
meanwhile
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contrary
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Thailand
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 and the
Philippines
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 have seen a much more gradual change. Similar trends are forecasted for all countries for the years 2030 and 2040,
although
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 the respective amounts for
Thailand
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 and the
Philippines
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 are estimated to converge at a faster rate.
To begin
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 with, Malaysia has witnessed a steady increase from around 30% of the people living in urban settlements to approximately 70% between 1970 and 2020, meaning that it has more than doubled in
its
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quantity and has gone through the greatest increase.
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, the
Philippines
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’ volume has fluctuated throughout in comparison to other countries.
This
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 is because it peaked at around 50% in 1990 after a plateau at 30%
initially
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, before experiencing a downward trend to roughly 40% in 2010.
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,
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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 have seen much more stable growth. By 2020
Indonesia
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 has reached its peak of around 49%, with a precipitous increase from 40% in 1970. Having said
this
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,
Thailand
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 has seen the most marginal rise to around 29% in the same year. Future projections ,
on the other hand
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, predict that whilst
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 is predicted to continue to dominate with its figures,
Thailand
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 is estimated to witness the greatest upsurge of around 10%.
Therefore
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,
this
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 will mean that the
Philippines
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 and
Thailand
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 are expected to converge even
further
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 in the upcoming 20-year period.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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