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Today more and more people want things instantly (e.g goods, services, news) Why is this? Is it positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, more
people
 need to get their work done as fast as they can
such
 as
services
, information goods, and
tasks
 with little wait time. I will explain why
this
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 is a negative trend because the
quality
 of their job might
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 the best. First of all, a lot of individuals nowadays would like to get their jobs done faster
such
 as
services
, information,
tasks
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and tasks
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 because of their lifestyles which make them have a number of errands so they
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are
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 more
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likely
 to expect most asks done instantly. The more
people
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 a busy
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lifestyle
 in the modern world, the more they choose all
tasks
 done instantly.
This
 is
negative
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a negative
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 development because
people
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 for an unhealthy way to feed themselves and when they require quick and instant
services
, the result of the service or
tasks
 might not be
the
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 best
quality
.
For instance
, when they want to have their hair cut they expect to finish it in 10 minutes so the hairdressers
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might
 feel stressed and the
quality
 of the
services
 might not be the best. The more
task
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tasks
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 of
services
 and done quickly, the more likely the possibility that
services
 or works are less in
quality
. In conclusion, most
people
 want all
tasks
 finished instantly because they have less time
work
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 on them.
In addition
, it is a negative development because the work
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they
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 produce or receive will not be the best because less time is spent on it.
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language
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and spelling. There are several errors that make the essay less fluent and harder to read, such as 'lisestke', 'ae', and 'asks'.
task achievement
Expand on your main points with more specific examples to make your argument stronger. For instance, you could mention the impact of fast food on health or the consequences of rushed medical procedures.
coherence cohesion
Try to better organize your essay into clear paragraphs with distinct points. Each paragraph should start with a main idea followed by supporting details.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your argument well.
task response
You have addressed both parts of the question, explaining why people want things instantly and discussing whether this is a positive or negative development.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instant gratification
  • Technological advancements
  • Consumer expectations
  • Same-day delivery
  • Streaming platforms
  • Information overload
  • Decision fatigue
  • Environmental implications
  • Societal implications
  • Resource depletion
  • Marketing strategies
  • Consumer satisfaction
  • Quality of life
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