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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look like after redevelopment next year.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and. Are comparisons where relevant.

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The blueprint presents the current area of Southwest
airport
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Airport
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 in relation to how it will appear in its updated version next year.
Overall
, the reconfiguration is expected to expand the three main areas of the terminal: the departures zone, the arrivals zone, and the boarding zone. Whilst a bag drop is projected to be added, the biggest change will involve the enlargement of the gate area and the addition of new infrastructure in the division for arriving travellers. As it currently stands, the region from where planes are boarded consists of 8 different exits. Whilst the departure space is filled with a
check in
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check-in
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 and a cafe,
this
 is contrary to the arrival area which is sparse in comparison. Having said
this
, both spaces contain
a
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apply
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passport control, which is situated next to the respective exits. Following construction works
however
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, however
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, the dedicated section for arrivals is expected to be filled with new facilities. Three new buildings are projected to be added which include a café, an ATM, and a car hire. Having said
this
, the designated building for departures isn’t expected to experience
such
 significant additions.
Instead
, the relevant facility for check-in will be relocated alongside the previously existing café, albeit a new bag drop infrastructure will be constructed.
Finally
, ten more pathways for customers to board their respective flights will be added.
As a consequence
,
this
 will substantially expand the boarding division, meaning that the quantity will increase from 8 to 18 boarding ways in total.
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Try to ensure all parts of the essay are equally balanced. The discussion of the arrivals zone was slightly more detailed than the discussion of the departures zone. Try to maintain an even level of detail throughout.
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While the information provided was clear and relevant, consider adding a concise summary that reiterates the most significant changes without introducing new information.
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A more explicit comparison throughout can help strengthen your analysis. For example, directly comparing the number and type of facilities in the old and new plans can make your essay more cohesive.
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The essay successfully summarized the main features and provided sufficient comparisons, accurate descriptions, and logical analysis.
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The vocabulary used was appropriate and varied, which enhanced the overall quality of the writing.
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The logical structure and connectivity within the paragraphs were effective, allowing the reader to easily follow the essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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