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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 illustrates the percentage of
men
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 and
women
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 who were not educated in different parts of the world in the previous year.
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,
women
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 always had a higher illiteracy percentage than
men
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, especially in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
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, where
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significant
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 lacking
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the ability to read or write.
According to
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 the data shown, Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
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 are the top three illiterate regions, with the largest percentage of illiterate population. Approximately 90% of people in South
Asia
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 were uneducated,
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 the figures
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 Sub-Saharan Africa and Arab States were more than 80%.
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, the illiteracy rates of
women
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 in these three regions were about
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 higher than
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's.
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, there were lower illiteracy rates in Latin
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America
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 (22%) and East
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 (30%),
as well as
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developed
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in developed
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 countries (3%).
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, the differences between the rates of different gender were lower in Latin American and developed countries.
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, the number of uneducated
men
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were
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 around half of
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the women's
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women's
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 in East
Asia
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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