The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The graphs provide information on
crime
in the UK for the
last
year. The information was broken down into age groups and four types of
crime
.
Overall
,
British
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the British
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whose
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apply
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age
Wrong verb form
aged
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between 16 to 24 had the highest
crime
rate,
whereas
the majority committed
crimes
related to
violent
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violence
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, property and
drug
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drugs
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. People
with
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between
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the
age
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ages
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between
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of
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16 to 28 committed the majority of
crimes
last
year.
According to
the line graph, there was an upward trend of teenagers (between 12 to 20 years old) committing
crimes
, the number soared from 50,000 to 700,000 and peaked at 800,000. When they grew older, the figures ebbed to 200,000 and
decline
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declined
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steadily to less than 10,000. Violent
accounts
Wrong verb form
accounted
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of
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for
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the majority of
crime
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crimes
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committed in the UK
last
year
with
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at
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46%
while
property and drug
crimes
were each half of that figure, with the former at 23% and the latter at 22%. A minority of people committed public order
crime
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crimes
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, at 9%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, crimes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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