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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The two pie charts
illustrates
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 the
martial
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marital
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 status of people in two countries, Canada and
Australia
.
Overall
, we can see that the ratio of different martial status in both countries
are
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is
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 similar,
whereas
 the majority of the population are married;
moreover
, the separating rate is high in both countries.
Although
 the majority (over 80%) of the
citizen
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citizens
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 in Canada and
Australia
 are in marriage, half of these people are separated. In
Australia
, 87% of the population are married
while
 nearly half of it, 41%, are separated.
Similarly
, 82% of
Canadian
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Canadians
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 are married but 53% of them no longer
living
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live
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 with their spouses. It is interesting to note that
proportions
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the proportions
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 of single citizens,
includes
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 people who are never married, widowed and divorced, in Canada and
Australia
 are similar with the former 15% in total and the latter 13%.
In addition
, 3% of
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Canadians
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Canadian
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Canadians
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 have
same sex
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same-sex
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 marriage.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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