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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the two pie charts provided reveals how much
electricity
Use synonyms
 the
world
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 consumed and generated
last
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 year. It is evident from the information given that fossil fuel was the major source of
power
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 on earth since
oil
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, coal and gasoline accounted for the majority of both the
world
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's
electricity
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 generation and
consumption
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. Renewable energy, including hydro and nuclear
power
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, was less common. Not surprisingly,
oil
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, coal and gas were the main sources of the
world
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's
electricity
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;
as a result
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, the total
consumption
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 of these energies accounted for 80% of the total. More than one-third of the
consumption
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 was sourced from
oil
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, followed by coal and gas at 25.1% and 20.9% respectively. In stark contrast,
however
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, the
electricity
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 supplied by
oil
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 and gas was less than the
demand
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. One particularly interesting fact highlighted by the figures is that the supply of most renewable energy was more than the
demand
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 as the supply of hydropower (16.1%) was 8 times higher than its
demand
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 (2.2%),
whereas
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 the supply of nuclear
power
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 (15.7%) was doubled its
demand
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 (6.5%).
Conversely
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,
although
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 10.6% of the
world
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's energy
consumption
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 was coming from combustible renewables & waste
power
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, there was no supply from that previous year.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, world, power, oil, consumption, demand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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