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The diagram below shows how glass is recycled. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how glass is recycled. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the recycling process of
glass
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.
Overall
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, a used
glass
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 bottle will go through four stages,
include
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including
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 transport, cleaning,
reproduce
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reproduction
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 and
deliver
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delivery
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, before going back on
market
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the market
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 for
sell
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sale
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. The
glass
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 products that consumers get from
the
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apply
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supermarkets may be
a
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apply
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product
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products
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 from
glass
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 recycling. After people empty the jars, they may recycle
that
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them
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 by putting the empty
bottle
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bottles
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 in the recycle bin.
Then
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 the
recycle
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 company collects those and delivers them to the treatment plant by truck. At the next stage, glasses go through the cleaning process and
being
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are
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 washed and sterilised by a washing and sterilising machine before getting ready for reproduction. Before moulding, glasses need to go through the crushing and melting machine. At
this
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 stage, glasses are crushed into small pieces and heated
with
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at
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 high
temperature
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temperatures
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 until becoming molten. After that, the molten will be shaped in the moulding machine. Once the products are ready, they will,
then
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, be delivered to
grocery
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the grocery
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 store for
sell
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sale
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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