The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.

The table shows the number of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales between 1851 and 1901.
The given table illustrates the proportion of employees and factories producing silk in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
Overall
, It can be viewed that the
number
of total
workers
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factory had
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decreased and the job field was dominated by
male
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males
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gender rather than
female
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females
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gender in between 1851 and 1901.
To begin
with, the
number
of total
workers
was
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roughly decreased where
it
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started
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starting
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from 130.750
people
in
year
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1851 and ended up
with
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38.942
people
in the
year
1901.
Moreover
, in the
year
1861, the
number
of total
workers
was about 109.869
people
and it fell
into
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more than
a
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half
number
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the number
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in the
year
1891 with about 49.025
people
.
In addition
, the
number
of female
workers
was
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decreased from 76.786
people
in the
year
1851 to 67.933
people
in the
year
1861
and
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followed
with
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the
number
of male
workers
that
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which
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slightly decreased from 53.964
people
in the
year
1851 to about 41.936
people
in
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ten years later.
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Furthermore
, the
number
of male
workers
fell
into
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about 13.375
people
in
year
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1901, followed by
number
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a number
the number
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of female
workers
with
appoximately
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approximately
twice
number
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the number
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of male
workers
which was about 25.567
people
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers, people, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Industrial expansion
  • Manufacturing hub
  • Technological innovation
  • Economic contribution
  • Productivity enhancement
  • Global market dynamics
  • Urbanization
  • Workforce demographics
  • Production scale
  • Social implications
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