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This graph shows the amount of money spent on books in germany, france, Italy and Australia between 1995 to 2005.

This graph shows the amount of money spent on books in germany, france, Italy and Australia between 1995 to 2005.
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The provided line graph illustrates how much
money
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 was spent on
books
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,in four various European countries over a decade. A glance at the graph reveals that there was an upward trend for
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 expenditure
in
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books
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 in Germany,France,Italy and Austria from 1995 to 2005.
on
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 the other meaning,people
prefered
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preferred
 to read
books
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 in these European countries over the period. In 1995,people paid
money
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 for
books
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 to around
of
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80
million
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dollars
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 in Germany and it peaked at just under 100
million
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dollars
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 in 2005.(Which was the highest amount of expenditure over the whole period).
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,as regards France,Spending
money
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 on
books
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initiated
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 at just over 50
million
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dollars
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 in 1995 and
then
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,It experienced a slight increase and
following
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this
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,reached
to
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nearly 75
million
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dollars
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 in 2005.
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,the average of
money
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 which was spent
for
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books
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 was exactly 50
million
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dollars
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 in Italy in 1995.After which,with a modest climb It turned to roughly 60
million
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dollars
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 in 2005.Interestingly,
money
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spending
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spent
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 was the least amount for purchasing
books
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 in Austria in 1995.Next,there was a moderate rise
for
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 people who paid their income for buying
books
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 in Austria in the first six
year
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 in Germany between 1995 to 2001.
However
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,
at the end
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 of the trend It rocketed
at
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 just over 70
million
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dollars
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 in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, books, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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