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The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. ielts-academic-coffee-shop-sales Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. ielts-academic-coffee-shop-sales Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided table illustrates numeral information about the office building's
coffee
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 shop's sales over the time period of 13 hours.
Overall
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,
It is clear that
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 sales have decreased as time passed.
Besides
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,
Coffee
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 was the best-seller item in
this
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 table.
To begin
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, From 7.30 to 10.30, The store's sales were 700, 256 Coffees, 100 Teas, 275 Pastries and 50
Sandwiches
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.
Moreover
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, From 10.30 to 2.30, the
Coffee
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 shop sold 185
Coffee
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, 50
Tea
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, 95 Pastries and 200
Sandwiches
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.
Sandwiches
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 were the maximum and
tea
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 was the minimum number on
this
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 raw.
Furthermore
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, From 2.30 to 5.30, 145
Coffee
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, 35
Tea
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, 150 Pastries and 40
Sandwiches
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 were sold.
In addition
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, At 5.30-8.30, We can see on the table that
coffee
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 was the best-seller of
this
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 period of time. In total, The first product was sold 795 times, the second one 270, the third one 600 and the
last
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 one 400 times.
finally
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,
Tea
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's number was the lowest.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sandwiches, tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sales data
  • Breakfast items
  • Early hours
  • Office workers
  • Beverages
  • Consistently popular
  • Noticeable increase
  • Lunch items
  • Significant period
  • Afternoon hours
  • Lighter refreshments
  • Evening hours
  • Overall sales
  • Energy boost
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