The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps show the changes in the village of Stokeford from 1930 to 2010.
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essay covers the changing spaces
about
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between
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both
pictures, the comparisons between them and their features. In 1930 and
in
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2010,
according to
both
photos
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photos,
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there was no displacement
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the location of the bridge that
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were along the Stoke River. There were shops and a post office in
west
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, but in 2010, the shops were demolished,
only
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the post office remained. Farmland was in the east and south in 1930,
however
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it was eliminated in 2010. Primary
school
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schools
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located in the west
was
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were
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different in
both
site and
apperance
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appearance
in 2010 than it was
1930
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in 1930
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.
While
there was a modification in the presence of the parks, a retirement house was built in 2010
instead
of a large house in 1930. The number of remaining key houses was 9 in 1930, and in 2010, it increased and they even took place on farms.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words both with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • maps
  • Stokeford
  • 1930
  • 2010
  • main features
  • overview
  • changes
  • similarities
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