The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The pie charts illustrate information about the proportion of various purposes for using
water
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six continents of the world. In general industrial use the most
water
in North America and
Europe
while
in the other regions utilise
water
for irrigation more than
three
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fourth of the total. First and foremost the amount of
water
used in
Europe
at 53
percent
which is a roughly identical ratio to North America with the previous being 5
percent
more than the latter.
Moreover
, it seems that
Europe
consumes more times the amount of
water
for industry compared to other regions.
Secondly
, using
water
for
agricultural
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possesses a high ratio in South America Africa Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
. Among these Central
Asia
has 88
percent
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of the
water
in
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of
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irrigation which is approximately 2 times more than
Europe
.
Last
but not least it appears that Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
have a similar ratio of 7
percent
for domestic use which
also
accounts for the lowest percentage in the world.
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those are still only
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half to a third if compared with
Europe
and South Africa respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, europe, percent, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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