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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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Given are 2 figures concerning land degradation. The pie chart demonstrates 4 main reasons for it and the table categorizes it by 3 different regions.
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, it is noticeable from the pie chart that the
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3 main
 causes of
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 problem are overgrazing,
over cultivation
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, and deforestation with approximately equal percentages. The percentage of degraded land in Europe is more than
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 other 3 mentioned regions.
According to
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 the pie chart, overgrazing has the highest percentage among other factors, followed by deforestation and
over cultivation
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 at 30% and 28% respectively.
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, 7% of degradation is caused by unmentioned factors. By looking at the table,
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 23% of land in Europe suffers from degradation,followed by Oceania at 13% and North America at 5%. The main factor of
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 issue in Europe is deforestation,
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 in North America, it has minimal impact with close to zero at 0.2%.
On the other hand
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, in Oceania, overgrazing is the most harmful factor, and
over cultivation
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 doesn't have any effect on it,
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 with North America, where it is the most important reason at 3.3%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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