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The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two bar charts
illustrates
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 the percentage of school
attendence
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attendance
 among 14 to 16 years old, who are learning
a
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apply
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modern international
languages
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 in a nation
whic
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which
 is speaking
an
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English within the top three
famouse foreing
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famous foreign
languages
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.
Overall
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,
proportion
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the proportion
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 of
students
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 who are
studiyng
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studying
an
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apply
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International
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 speaks, girls
are
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more than boys since they started.
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,
top
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the top
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 three
languages
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which
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are
learning
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learned
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 by
students
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. The highest is French in both of period time, and the lowest is Spanish which
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increased in the end.
To begin
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 with, in 1984 school girls
are
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attending
for
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forieng
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foreign
 language was
on
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at
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th
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the
 top at 48% approximately. Despite 30% of boys who are
attended
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.
However
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, in the year
of
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2007 girls
are
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decreased to 40%, which
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 8% of
students
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are
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were
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 not interested.
Therefore
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, boys
also
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,
droped
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dropped
 down to 25% of all
students
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 who are
stduied
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studied
.
On the other hand
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, French is the most
popularity
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 in the
languaes
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languages
language
 which are in three
languages
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, The highest percentage
at
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in
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 1984 and 2007.
Nevertheless
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, in 2007 was
droped
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dropped
 to 25%.
Moreover
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, Spanish is the lowest at started in 1984
,
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 but increased to 10% in 2007. German is the only language is 20% and
droped
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dropped
 5% in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "droped" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • modern foreign languages
  • English-speaking country
  • demographic
  • participation
  • gender disparities
  • trends
  • popularity rankings
  • analyzing
  • implications
  • cultural factors
  • economic ties
  • global job market
  • increasingly globalized
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