The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Both
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Germany
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and
France
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generate over 500 Billion kWh every year. Over 80% of
energy
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is produced by nonrenewable resources
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in
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both
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countries.
However
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, conventional thermal
energy
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plays a bigger role in
Germany
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than
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France
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by around 50%.
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, in
France
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over 75% of produced
electricity
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is from nuclear power plants,
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are relatively eco-friendly if taken care of. Speaking of renewable
energy
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, hydroelectric
energy
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is the biggest renewable
energy
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resource in
France
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by far and only the third in
Germany
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, with biomass and wind
energy
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occupying the two top spots. Geothermal
energy
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is yet to produce
electricity
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in
both
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France
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and
Germany
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, currently countrywide producing less than 0,1% of
electricity
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.
To sum up
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,
both
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France
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and
Germany
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are dependent on conventional thermal
electricity
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generation but
France
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is a little bit more. They
both
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still have a long way to go before the majority of
energy
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is produced by renewable
energy
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sources.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words both, germany, france, energy, electricity with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity generation
  • renewable sources
  • conventional thermal
  • nuclear power
  • hydroelectric power
  • biomass
  • wind energy
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • significant
  • contributor
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