Miss Barret, an English-speaking woman living in your town, has advertised for someone to help her around the house for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs. Barrett. In your letter * Suggest how you can help him at home tell me why you want to do this job describe when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barrett, I am writing

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letter because

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I saw your advertisement on the street board. I want to say when I saw your advertisement and I am happy to say that I can help you for a few days a week what do you need. Actually, I am a cleaning person. My

favorite

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homework is vacuuming, dusting and organizing the house.

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vacuuming the house I feel renewed. It is like

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organized

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thought. When we clean, I feel like our life gets so

easier

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. I want to do

this

job one more reason because maybe you can help me

for

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my English. Nowadays, I am

triyng

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trying

to improve my English level and I really need to

practice

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. Maybe we can talk

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english

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between

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and you can help me to change my mistakes. Generally, I can help you

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with 3

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hours

for

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every Monday, Wednesday and Friday. It will be enough for cleaning and speaking practice.

Dont

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worry about money, it is not important for me, If ı can help you, it will make me feel good. I am

waiting

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your feedback. Kağan

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coherence cohesion

Try to start with a clear introduction stating the purpose and mention where you saw the advertisement more naturally.

coherence cohesion

Focus on using one main idea per paragraph for better organization. For example, one paragraph can describe your experience, another can explain your motivation, and a third can discuss your availability.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing of the letter are friendly and appropriate for the context.

task achievement

You have addressed all parts of the prompt, providing a suitable response with clear motivation, availability, and how you can help.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

187 words

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