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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph given illustrates the production rates of three major types of
energy
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 sources from 1981 to 2000 in the UK. From
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overall
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an overall
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perspectives
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perspective
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,
petroleum
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 was a main source
as well as
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 had the highest consumption during the period. Natural
gas
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 underwent a fluctuating rise,
however
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, coal showed a reverse pattern. In 1981, the amount of
energy
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that
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apply
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produced by
petroleum
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 was the highest value, at about 90
units
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, and one
energy
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 unit is
a
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the
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 total of
energy
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that
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apply
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collected from one million tones of oil. Meanwhile, coal
producted
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produced
 about 80
energy
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units
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,
whereas
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, natural
gas
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 contributed nearly 40
units
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as well as
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 was the lowest number. There was
a
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significant growth in
petroleum
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 to about 140
units
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 in 1984 and it
had been
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was
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maintaned
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maintained
 for the next three years. After decreasing to 100
units
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 in 1990, the production of
petroleum
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 increased back to approximately 140
units
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 in the
last
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 year. Coal remained the same
to
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in
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 1982
then
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 it suddenly witnessed a huge drop to under 40
units
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 in 1984 compared to the same amount in that
of
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natural
gas
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. After that, coal
recoverd
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recovered
 to 60
units
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 in the period between 1986 and 1989 before gradually falling to about 30
units
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in
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at
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 the end of the period. The figure for natural
gas
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 stayed stable from 1981 to 1990 at 40
units
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 before rising steadily to 100
units
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 in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, petroleum, gas, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • main kinds of fuel
  • time frame
  • location
  • data
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • specific data points
  • petroleum
  • nuclear fuel
  • natural gas
  • coal
  • fluctuations
  • correlations
  • patterns
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • provide
  • general summary
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