The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar charts

illustrates

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the percentage of

students

who studied a foreign language in

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English and the top three foreign languages from 1984 to 2007.

Overall

, it can be seen that the proportion of girls was higher than boys in studying English.

Additionally

, it can be noted that French was the most popular tongue

which

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studied by

students

. Looking at the number of girls and boys who studied

foreign

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a foreign

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language in an

English speaking

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country

were

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about 48% and 30%, respectively. After that, the

girls

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proportion

had

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decrease

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to 40% and the

boy

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also

declined to nearly 35%. Turning towards

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the percentage of top three languages which

students

studied almost, French, German and Spanish. In terms of French, it was 50% in the initial year of the period,

then

it decreased dramatically to roughly 24% by 2007.

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German

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Germany

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, it had 20% of the

students

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to study,

however

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fell

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to 14% in the final year. With the exception of Spanish, it was about 4% in 1987, after that the final year saw a marginal increase of 6%.

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