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The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the percentage of
students
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 who studied a foreign language in
an
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English and the top three foreign languages from 1984 to 2007.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the proportion of girls was higher than boys in studying English.
Additionally
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, it can be noted that French was the most popular tongue
which
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studied by
students
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. Looking at the number of girls and boys who studied
foreign
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a foreign
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 language in an
English speaking
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English-speaking
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 country
were
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was
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 about 48% and 30%, respectively. After that, the
girls
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girl's
girls'
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 proportion
had
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apply
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a
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apply
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decrease
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decreased
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 to 40% and the
boy
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boys
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also
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 declined to nearly 35%. Turning towards
to
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the percentage of top three languages which
students
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 studied almost, French, German and Spanish. In terms of French, it was 50% in the initial year of the period,
then
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 it decreased dramatically to roughly 24% by 2007.
About
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In
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German
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Germany
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, it had 20% of the
students
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choosing
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chose
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 to study,
however
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,
it
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this
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 fell
down
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to 14% in the final year. With the exception of Spanish, it was about 4% in 1987, after that the final year saw a marginal increase of 6%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • modern foreign languages
  • English-speaking country
  • demographic
  • participation
  • gender disparities
  • trends
  • popularity rankings
  • analyzing
  • implications
  • cultural factors
  • economic ties
  • global job market
  • increasingly globalized
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