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The line graph below shows the number of monthly active users of some social network and messaging services between 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of monthly active users of some social network and messaging services between 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart reveals the number of active people using different social
site
Fix the agreement mistake
sites
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 between 2010 and 2015.
Overall
,
One
site
 contributed the highest percentages in both years 2014 and 2015, but five
sites
 had the lowest use among the people. The most popular networking
site
 belongs to
One
site
 which was 28% in 2015
while
 the percentage of it in year 2014 was more than in 2015. Two
sites
 had the second highest number of people and unlike
one
site
, two
sites
 increased in 2015 and went up to 24%. The lowest number of users belongs to five
sites
 which was 4% in 2015,
however
, it gradually grew compared to 2014. The four
sites
 and Three
sites
 showed a dramatic
rises
Correct the article-noun agreement
rise
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 in
one
 year,
on
Change preposition
in
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 contrast, no
sites
 dropped between 2014 and 2015. The percentage of five
sites
 is about
one
-tenth of
one
site
.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words site, one, sites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • monthly active users
  • social network services
  • messaging services
  • time frame
  • observe a trend
  • fluctuation
  • noticeable increase
  • significant decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • exponential growth
  • relative decline
  • steady rise
  • dramatic fall
  • comparative analysis
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