The charts below show the most populer films by genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010.

The charts below show the most populer films by genre  for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010.
The below charts
depicts
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the famous films for
males
and females and the
sales
of tickets for various movies in
USA
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the USA
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in 2010. From the
table
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it is clear that
men captured the most significant place in going to
cinema
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the cinema
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except
romantic
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comedy
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comedies
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. The women dominate in romantic
comedy
,
while
in other genres there is not
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much interest. Action movies are the most popular among
males
with a number of 40 and it is the highest trend within all genres. In
comedy
and
western
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movies
males
and females are in the same positions
accordingly
20 and 10. In thriller and science fiction
males
again experienced high
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with a
number
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15 and 10.
In
contrast
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women are six-fold higher in romantic
comedy
. When comes to
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chart the interest
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action tickets is nearly half of all sold ones with
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number 49 %. The
sales
of
comedy
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genre captured nearly
quarter
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a quarter
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of total
sales
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proportion of 24%. From the pie
chart
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it is
also
clear that the
sales
of tickets for
thriller
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thrillers
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and romantic
comedy
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comedies
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is
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in the lowest position as the figure for
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a thriller
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thriller
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thrillers
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is 10% and for romantic
comedy
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comedies
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is 12%. (Samir Nabiyev)
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