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The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.

The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.
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The table illustrates the results of an investigation which was about the percentage of
people
 aged over 16 years old engaged in various cultural activities in Scotland during the period of 12 months.
Overall
, most Scottish adults participated more in any performances, with the exception of the 45 to 74 age group which undertaking any crafts came out on top.
Additionally
, any
performance
 saw the highest figure among
people
 between 16 and 24 years old,
while
 the opposite was true for any writing and
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 of
people
 aged from 45-74. In
further
 detail,
people
 who belonged to the 16-24 age group took part most in any
performance
 at 35%, followed by any visual arts at 30% and the other categories ranged between 10% and 17%.
Similarly
,
people
 aged from 25 to 44 had the highest percentage of any
performance
 at 22%,
while
 undertaking any crafts and cultural purchases both the same at 17%.
This
 was followed by any visual arts at 16% and figures for
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 and any writing were much lower at 9% and 6% respectively. Regarding the data for all aged 16 and over, any performances saw the highest proportion at 22%,
while
 the others ranged between 7% and 19% with
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 hitting a mere 6%. Turning to
people
 aged 45-74, where undertaking any crafts dominated at 22%, whilst cultural purchases, any
performance
 and any visual arts saw figures between 11% and 18%.
However
, any writing and
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 accounted for the same percentage of 5%.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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