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The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in industrial sector, in Two European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The charts below show the number of working hours per week, in industrial sector, in Two European countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The bar charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 industrial sectors working
hours
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 weekly in two
european
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European
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contries
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countries
 in 2002 including France and Denmark.
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, it can be seen that the workers percentage who had 1 - 14
hours
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 and over 50
hours
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both
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 France and Denmark are relatively
same
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the same
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. Looking in more detail, in France, the employees that spent their working with duration 1-14, 41-45 and over 50
hours
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 stood at 10%.
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workers
which
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who
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 experienced 15-20, 21-30 and 56-50
hours
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 were in range from over 10%-20%. Meanwhile,
majority
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the majority
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people
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of people
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 at
occupation
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the occupation
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 office worked for 31-35 and 36-40
hours
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 namely 50% and over 30% respectively. In the meantime, in Denmark, 70%
people
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of people
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 did their job for 36-40
hours
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 and 20% spent 31-35
hours
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.
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, for people that were available or in working
hours
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 zone with duration
about
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of about
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 1-30
hours
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 and 41-50+
hours
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 were only 10% for those durations.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average
  • proportion
  • comparison
  • significant
  • industrial sector
  • working hours
  • productivity
  • employee well-being
  • policies
  • cultural factors
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