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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. summarize the information and make a comparison. write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. summarize the information and make a comparison. write at least 150 words.
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The bar charts illustrate the data on the average weekly wage expenditure of
families
 in a nation in a half-decade.
Overall
, it can be seen that most of the income of a family in 1968 was spent on
families
' consumption.
However
, in 2018
this
 trend was changed and most of the income was allocated for hobbies and housing. On the one hand, in 1968, about 35% of weekly income was spent on
the
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food
wich
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 was the highest amount of expenditure of all periods. The housing and clothing sections
was
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stood at the same level with only one ten per cent of wage.
Furthermore
, all other types of costs of
families
 had similar shares , around 7%, but fuel and power
cost
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was
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 the least in
compariosn
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comparison
 to other sections.
On the other hand
, in 2018, leisure activities by almost 23% proportions
was
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 the part that
families
 had to spend their money on it.
While
 housing and food with a minor difference to leisure activities' expenditure
were
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stood at the second most activities that
families
 spent on them.
Although
,
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 the
houshold
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household
 goods share was not changed over
this
 50-year period, the personal
good
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goods
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as well as
 clothing and Fuel
was
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were
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 the lowest of costs
between
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 American people with only one twenty per cent.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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