You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir, I saw your advertisement
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the Australian
magzine
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magazine
about your
child
care
. I want to express my interest
for
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this
job and I look forward to taking
care
of your 6-year-old
child
. I am interested in
this
job as I am a
family oriented
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individual. I have been lucky enough to take
care
of my cousins when I was a teenager. Most importantly I have a daughter now who is
7-year-old
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7 years old
at the moment. I contributed an integral part in her upbringing and
care
along with
her mother.
Hence
therfore
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therefore
I will be more
then
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happy and excited to take
care
of your
child
. I am well aware of children's sleep cycle, diet , character and personality
dvelepment
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development
. Kids of
these age
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are sensitive and fragile so they need tailored coaching with regards to their habits. I find it really interesting to explore different behaviours
and
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take
care
of them
accordingly
and guide kids when deemed necessary. To be really
speicifc
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specific
, I find it really easy to
convinve
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convince
children to eat
vegetables
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, and
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dairy diet which is uncommon these days.
Also
, let me know if your
child
have
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any allergies, I will be mindful about it. I have
my
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friend who lives just across the street. I usually visit him in my free time.
Moreover
I am a fitness freak so
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prefer to go on
walk
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daily. I plan to visit
museum
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the museum
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and other related
recrational
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recreational
spots over the weekend. I would be more
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happy to take your
child
as well. I hope you consider my request and let me know the outcome at the
earlist
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earliest
possible. Looking forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Rohan Ahmed
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task achievement
Proofread to catch minor errors and improve clarity. For example, correct spelling mistakes such as 'magzine' (magazine) and 'dvelepment' (development).
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and supports your overall message.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, making it professional.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for the context.
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The letter includes relevant personal experiences, making the response meaningful and convincing.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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