The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two given bar charts
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the
number
of 14-to 16-years-old pupils studying a foreign
language
in
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the country
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country
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countries
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where
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that
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using
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English for speaking, and
top
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three foreign
language
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languages
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in the
year
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years
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1984 and 2007.
Overall
, the pupils who studied a foreign
language
was
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dominated by girls.
However
, french became the
most languages
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language
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that
students
had
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studied.
Firstly
, the
number
of
female
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females
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gender who
was
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studied
foreign
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a foreign
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language
was about approximately 50
percent
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per cent
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in the
year
1984 and
then
was
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fell
into
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to
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40
percent
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per cent
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in the
year
2007. Meanwhile, the
number
of boys who had studied a foreign
language
in the
year
1984
only
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was only
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about 30
percent
. It
then
decreased to 25
percent
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per cent
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in the
year
2007.
On the other hand
, the top
language
were
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studied by the pupils among
three
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language
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languages
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(French, German, Spanish) was French with about 50
percent
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per cent
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of the
students
in the
year
1984. Meanwhile, it decreased
about
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by about
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a half
number
to 25
percent
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per cent
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in the
year
2007.
Furthermore
, the
number
of
students
who studied German
was
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decreased to 15
percent
in the
year
2007
whereas
its
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it was
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about 20
percent
in the
year
1984.
Conversely
, there was an increase in the
number
of
students
who studied Spanish
with
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by
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about two times
number
from 5
percent
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per cent
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in the
year
1984 to 10
percent
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per cent
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in 2007.
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