The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. summarize the information and make a comparison. write at least 150 words.
The chart showed some data
how
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on how
families
in the country used their weekly salary compare
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compared
in
1968 and 2018. Based on the data, Change preposition
to
families
in 1968 spent their most money
on food, while
families
in 2018 spent most money
in
their leisure or travelling. Change preposition
on
Furthermore
, families
in 1968 spent the least amount of money
in
fuel and power same with the Change preposition
on
families
in 2018, but adding in personal goods for families
in 2018.
Food is the aspect that families
in 1968 spent their most of money
and
established around 35 Change preposition
on and
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
However
, people
in 2018 spent less money
on food than 1968
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in 1968
people
that only around 15 percent
. AsChange the spelling
per cent
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to a
a
information given in the data, Correct article usage
the
people
in 2018 spent most of their money
on leisure, around 20 percent
and Change the spelling
per cent
this
is quadruple compared to people
in 1986 that
only Correct word choice
who
cost
around 5 Verb problem
spent
percent
on Change the spelling
per cent
the
leisure.
Fuel and power still became the least aspect that Correct article usage
apply
families
in 1968 and 2018 spent their salary
on Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
to
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apply
it
. But Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
in 1968 spent more money
on fuel and power that
more than 5 Correct word choice
than
percent
, Change the spelling
per cent
while
2018
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in 2018
people
spent less than 5 percent
on that.Change the spelling
per cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, money, percent, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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