The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018. summarize the information and make a comparison. write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.  summarize the information and make a comparison. write at least 150 words.
The chart showed some data
how
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on how
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families
in the country used their weekly salary
compare
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compared
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in
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to
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1968 and 2018. Based on the data,
families
in 1968 spent their most
money
on food,
while
families
in 2018 spent most
money
in
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on
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their leisure or travelling.
Furthermore
,
families
in 1968 spent the least amount of
money
in
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on
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fuel and power same with the
families
in 2018, but adding in personal goods for
families
in 2018. Food is the aspect that
families
in 1968 spent their most of
money
and
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on and
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established around 35
percent
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per cent
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.
However
,
people
in 2018 spent less
money
on food than
1968
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in 1968
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people
that only around 15
percent
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per cent
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. As
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to a
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a
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the
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information given in the data,
people
in 2018 spent most of their
money
on leisure, around 20
percent
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per cent
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and
this
is quadruple compared to
people
in 1986
that
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who
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only
cost
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spent
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around 5
percent
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per cent
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on
the
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apply
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leisure. Fuel and power still became the least aspect that
families
in 1968 and 2018 spent their
salary
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on
to
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apply
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it
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apply
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. But
people
in 1968 spent more
money
on fuel and power
that
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than
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more than 5
percent
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per cent
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,
while
2018
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in 2018
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people
spent less than 5
percent
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per cent
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on that.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, money, percent, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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