Mrs Barrett an english speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs Barrett. In your letter 1. suggest how you could help her in her home 2. say why you would like to do this work 3. explain when you will and will not be available Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follows Dear Mrs Barrett,
Dear Mrs Barrett,
Hi,
this
is Alyssa. I saw your advertisement on Facebook regarding to help
some Change the verb form
helping
work
at your place. I am currently studying in
the university, so that would be great for me if I Change preposition
at
can
Wrong verb form
could
work
during summer
holiday period.
What kind of job are you expecting from workers? I have done Add an article
the summer
variety
of jobs Add an article
a variety
in
the farm as a volunteer, Change preposition
on
while
I was traveling
around New Zealand. Change the spelling
travelling
Such
as:
gardening, cleaning, and fixing Remove the comma
apply
stuffs
. Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
Also
, I am most of the time working outside, so I am willing to do any physical jobs if you
needed.
I am Correct pronoun usage
apply
exchange
student from Japan and still learning English. Add an article
an exchange
However
, most of my classmates are non-native speakers. I do not have much
opportunities to talk with native English speakers, so Change the quantifier
many
that is
helpful for me to work
with you and build my confident
Replace the word
confidence
of
my English.
Since it is during school holidays, I am able to Change preposition
in
work
anydays
and Correct your spelling
any day
pretty
flexible. Add a missing verb
am pretty
Although
,
I live in Remove the comma
apply
Add an article
a suburb
suburb
area and away from your place, Replace the word
suburban
therefore
it would be better for me to work
in a
Correct article usage
the
day time
. Please let me know if it suits Correct your spelling
daytime
for
you or not. I can Change preposition
apply
also
give you more information as well.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Best Regards,
AlyssaSubmitted by arii0113 on
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Pay close attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage to enhance grammatical accuracy. For example, replace 'regarding to help' with 'regarding helping with work.'
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Try to provide a more detailed description of your availability. Clarifying specific times could make your offer more concrete.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear objective for each paragraph. This can help in presenting each idea more cohesively.
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You effectively explained why you are interested in the job, which adds a nice personal touch.
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The tone of the letter is friendly and polite, suitable for the purpose of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Opening and closing parts of the letter flow naturally, contributing to the overall cohesiveness.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite