The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the total number of minutes(in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided intot three categories , from 1995-2002

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The
chart
gives information about the rates of
minutes
who
uses
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mobile
call
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calls
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in the UK
which
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with
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three types in the years 1995 and 2002.
Overall
, the
chart
illustrated many call
type
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types
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local , national
and
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apply
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international and mobile .
It is clear that
the local trend was the highest trend in the
chart
in contrast
the mobile ( all calls ) made the lowest rate in the
chart
. Now
turnin
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turnin'
turning
to details in 1995 the black line was the lowest number in
chart
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the chart
a chart
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it was under 10
minutes
billion after that the trend
mobiles
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mobile
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growth
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grew
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gradually to reach in 2002 approximately 45
minutes
billions
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billion
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calls . National and international was
increasing
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moderately from 1995 to 2002 and they hit a peak when
reach
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to
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60
minutes
billion
call
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in 2002 .
However
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the
figures's
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local was rose gradually til 1998 and 1999 after which
decline
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declined
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to reach above 70
minutes
billion
call
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calls
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, minutes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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