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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four ASEAN countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four ASEAN countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 chart provides a
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 of the
population
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 living in cities. The graph links between years and
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 of the
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.
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, Malaysia's
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 is bigger than other cities.
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 there is a huge increase in the
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 of the
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. It is clear to see that Malaysia is the first city with an increase in
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 with 80% till 2040 and
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 about a 50% change since 1970. In 1970, Philipins started to increase slowly from 30%
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 it reached 50% by 2040 which is the highest point since 1990. Between 1970 and 2040, there is a clear change in Thailand boomed from 20% to 45% Over the double.
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, Indonesia's
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 has increased quartile times to 60% from 15%. Regarding the giving
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 it is noticeable that the number of people has increased with time. The lowest
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 reached 15% of Indonesia's
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while
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 the highest
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 reached 80% of Malaysia.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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