Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to child's development as other subjects, so it shoube compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays,
art
is an essential subject as other subjects to growth
children more advanced. It must be done in high schools. Replace the word
grow
This
essay agrees with this
viewpoint and will now set out some examples of the benefits of art
classes to support that reasoning.
It is vital to understand that art
is important
subject to improve Add an article
an important
child's
creativity. Painting and drawing can express their feeling and imagination. Correct article usage
a child's
Moreover
, it can improve their skills to deal with a difficult problem or another subjects
Replace the adjective
another subject
other subjects
such
as math. For instance
, when students painting
or Wrong verb form
paint
drawing
they will think out of the box or develop the power of thinking.
Another point to consider is that an ability that you can develop with training and practice effectively. Wrong verb form
draw
Besides
, art
can be made
entertain Verb problem
apply
for
people Change preposition
apply
that
they feel Correct word choice
so
relax
, Wrong verb form
relaxed
Correct word choice
and stressful
stressful
. Replace the word
stressed
Moreover
, they can look up
better Change preposition
for
job
after they have Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
university
degree Add an article
a university
of
Change preposition
in
art
. For instance
, architect
or engineerCorrect article usage
an architect
a
person Add a missing verb
is a
who
job is Correct pronoun usage
whose
designing
buildings to develop their mind.
In conclusion, Change the verb form
to design
art
improves child's
creativity or child's skill. Correct article usage
a child's
Thus
, this
essay has shown art
classes are important for children.Submitted by [email protected]
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