The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050.

The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050.
The line graph illustrates New Zealand's demographic chart between 1950 and 2050.
Overall
, there number of senior citizens over 65 years was the largest social class in New Zealand's population over the period, followed by the figure for middle-aged residents between 38 and 45 years.
While
the
percentages
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of people under 37 years
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are
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less than 25% during the period. The figure for elderly over 65 was the largest in the examined timeline, starting at 60% in the first year and reaching almost 70% of the current population in the 90s,
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by a consistent decline to approximately 55% in 2024. The demographic share of juveniles under 14 was the lowest
ratio
before 2000, followed by a gradual climb from 3% in 1990 to just 20% in 2024, but
this
increase did not start until the late 1990s. Both of them will
last
these tendencies until 2050 to 56% and 21%, respectively. The equivalent proportion for middle-aged from 38 to 45 and adults from 25 to 37 started at under 24% in 1950. The former figure increased twofold times to 48% in 1990,
while
the latter quantity
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fluctuation in a gradual decline to 20% in the 90s. From 1990 onwards, the former percentage minimally declined to 40% in 2000, before maintaining its
ratio
until 2050. The latter
ratio
witnessed a significant drop to 5% in 2024, the
ratio
is anticipated to
last
its decline tendencies to 1% in 2050.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words ratio with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.

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  • Fluctuating trends
  • Projections
  • Percentage
  • Demographic changes
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Stable
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Growth/Decline
  • Patterns
  • Historical context
  • Population dynamics
  • Trends
  • Significant shifts
  • Peaks and troughs
  • Forecasts
  • Projections
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