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Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter -describe what you like about the library - say what you don’t like - make suggestions for improvements

#library #improvements #services #facilities #users #suggestions #librarian #-describe #don’t
Dear sir,
Iam writting
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I am writing
this
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reguarding
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regarding
 the public
library
 which needs
few
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 improvements
services
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 and facilities.
firstly
,coming to
library
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i
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 mostly like
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the
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verious
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various
collection
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collections
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 of books written by famous
writters
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writers
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importent
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important
 to our
enducation
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education
 and
compitative
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competitive
 exams .
secondly
, need
few
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 changes which
helps
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 to public ,
library
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has
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 more space to organise and
need
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 to add
few
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 booksheves and sitting tables, when
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 weekends sitting tables are
little
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 busy by adding sheves the organization of books may
eassy
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 to find out for
public
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.
futhermore
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Furthermore
, expecting these changes and improvements in future
too
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to
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 create
best
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the best
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envinorment
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environment
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library
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 space. yours faithfully, Nanoo.
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task achievement
There are several spelling and grammatical errors. Make sure to proofread your work to correct mistakes such as 'Iam', 'reguarding', 'writting', and 'eassy'.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your letter is generally clear, but it could benefit from better organization. Each paragraph should have a single main idea. For example, one paragraph could focus on what you like about the library, another on your dislikes, and a third on suggestions for improvements.
task achievement
You have effectively covered all the points required by the task: what you like, what you don't like, and your suggestions for improvements.
task achievement
Your writing tone is polite and respectful, which is appropriate for a letter to a librarian.
coherence cohesion
You have used greeting and closing statements appropriately, which adds to the formal structure of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extensive collection
  • resourceful
  • helpful staff
  • friendly assistance
  • tranquil atmosphere
  • comfortable environment
  • limited operating hours
  • restricted access
  • insufficient study spaces
  • quiet spot
  • extend the hours
  • accommodate
  • private study rooms
  • cater
  • digital resources
  • e-books
  • audiobooks
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