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Band 5.5

You are going to move out of your apartment in a English-speaking country. Your landlord is a very good person, who has assisted you a lot during your stay. Meanwhile, your friend would like to rent the flat after you. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, •Let your landlord know that you will be leaving •Thank you landlord for his/her help •Tel him/her about your friend

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Hello John, I hope
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find
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 you in high spirits.
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 been a
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 met each other. I feel very happy to be your tenant. Do you remember, I discussed with you that
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 have applied for a job in
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. I am very excited to let you know that I got
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 job in a real estate corporation. I will be moving there
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 the end of
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 month, as I have to start my work in the first week of next month.
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 reason, I have to leave your apartment.
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, all I have is my heartfelt gratitude to you. I know when I moved here, I was not aware
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 anything and you helped me a lot. I remember the incident when
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 lost all my money and no one was ready to help out. You helped me financially and gave me emotional support. Things were not going well on my end but god sent you to me as a gift, you are a blessed soul. To add, I
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 want to inform you that one of my
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 is interested
to move
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in moving
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to
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 your apartment. He is my childhood friend,
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and we
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 both completed
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high school together. He is
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 responsible and mature person. I trust him always. I just want you to meet him once and decide about his moving to your place. See you soon! Take care, Baljeet

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a single clear idea. Your letter has a good flow, but occasionally multiple ideas are included in one paragraph, which can be streamlined for better coherence.
task achievement
You could add a bit more specific information about your friend's suitability for renting the apartment to strengthen your recommendation.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are friendly yet appropriate for the context, which suits the tone of the letter well.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is very suitable, showing gratitude and maintaining a cordial relationship with the landlord.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • landlord
  • apartment
  • move out
  • kindness
  • assistance
  • gratitude
  • friend
  • potential tenant
  • suitable
  • rental terms
  • meeting
  • facilitate
  • closing
  • warm regards
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