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The table below gives information on UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Makecomparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on UK acid rain emissions, measured in millions of tonnes, from four different sectors between 1990 and 2007. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Makecomparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the amount of
acid
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 rain emissions from four different categories in the United Kingdom from 1990 to 2007.
Overall
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, it is evident that Electricity, Gas and Water supply, Other industries
as well as
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 Domestic showed a downward trend,
while
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 a reserve pattern could be observed in the figure for Transport and communication over the surveyed period. In 1991, the number of
acid
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 rain emissions from Electricity, Gas and Water supply was the highest, at approximately 3.3
million
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tonnes
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. The figures for Other industries
as well as
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 Transport and communication were lower, at about 2.1
million
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tonnes
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 and nearly 0.8
million
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tonnes
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, respectively. Domestic,
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, accounted for the lowest value, at just above 0.5
million
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tonnes
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. From 1991 to 2007, the amount of
acid
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 rain released from the Electricity, Gas and Water supply witnessed a dramatic decline to around 0.5
million
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tonnes
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at the end
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 of the time frame.
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, the data on Other industries and Domestic decline slightly to somewhere in the vicinity of 1.2
million
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tonnes
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 and 0.3
million
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tonnes
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 in 2007, in the given order.
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, the number of
acid
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 deposition generated by Transport and communication experienced a fluctuating growth to 1
million
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tonnes
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,
then
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 slightly decreased to around 0.8
million
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tonnes
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at the end
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 of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words acid, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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