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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.
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The line graphs illustrate how the percentages of Australian
export
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exports
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 changed from 1990 to 2012 in four different nations namely Japan,
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the U.S
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the U.S
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U.S
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U.S.
,
China
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 and
India
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. Units were measured in the form of
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percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
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, what stands out the most from the line chart is that
export
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the export
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 rates of
China
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had
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 dramatically increased.
China
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 ranked the highest
percentage
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 in
exports
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export
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 rates in 2012,
while
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India
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 ranked the lowest in the given
year
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.
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The
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 most significant difference in the
percentage
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 between
China
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 and
India
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 was found in the
year
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of
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apply
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2012. In terms of
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year
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the year
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 1990, Japan ranked
first,
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being about 27 per
cent
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 of total Australian export rates, followed by
U.S.
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the U.S.
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 and
China
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, having around 12 and 2 per
cent
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, respectively. The most marginal
percentage
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 reported was
India
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 with approximately 3.5 per
cent
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. With regards
of
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to
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year
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the year
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 2010,
China
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 was the highest with about 26 per
cent
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, and
this
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 figure was around 21 per
cent
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 higher than that of 2000.
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,
U.S.
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the U.S.
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 had about 6
percent
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per cent
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 where the
percentage
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 decreased significantly from 12 per
cent
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 in 2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, india, percentage, year, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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