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Write a letter to you friend who want to stay at you home, but you will be away on a vacation for a month. Discuss details about the trip and how yo get keys of the apartment

#friend #home #vacation #month #trip #yo #keys #apartment
Dear Meg, Hi, how have you been? Thank you for accepting a
housesitting
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house
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while
 I'm away. I'm going to Indonesia on a surf trip for a month, but I
needed
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need
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 to find someone to look after my
cat
. I really appreciate that you can help me. I'll explain
you
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to you
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 some details about my
cat
 and how you can find the key as well. Mainly, only 2 things to do for my
cat
. Feed her 2 times
in
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apply
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a day. There is a bag of
cat
 food in the kitchen. And
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the othre
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othre
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other
 thing is keeping an eye on
for
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the toilet.
Otherwise
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Otherwise,
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 she's pretty chill and easy so you don't need to worry too much!
Also
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Also,
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 I'll leave the key in the envelope and you can find it in the
letter box
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letterbox
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 "302". Feel free to use
like
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it like
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 your home. Don't hesitate to ask me if you're unsure about
somethings
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something
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.
Hopefully
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Hopefully,
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 I'll see you when I come back from my holiday! Best Regards, Alyssa
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Grammar
Make sure to check and correct small grammatical errors and typos to improve readability.
Task Achievement
Although the content is clear, expanding a bit more on the details of your trip and any specific instructions for your friend could enhance the response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph addresses a single idea to improve coherence.
Tone
Your writing tone is suitable and friendly, which is ideal for personal letters.
Structure
You have a clear greeting and closing, which helps structure your letter well.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • host
  • regret
  • destination
  • intriguing
  • collect
  • security systems
  • house rules
  • recommendations
  • nearby attractions
  • emergency contact information
  • make yourself at home
  • keep in touch
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