The youth in many countries are unemployed and unskilled, while at the same time, the military services are in need of people. Compulsory military service is beneficial and necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that compulsory military service is beneficial and necessary
for
both physically and mentally. Now individuals are beginning to realize that the youngsters in many countries are unemployed and unskilled, Change preposition
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while
at the same time, the military services are in need of people. Personally, I tend to think that the youth must not serve their home country
and protect it since they are
can be essential reasons behind it.
On the one hand, it is well known that there are Unnecessary verb
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195countries
in the whole world and Correct your spelling
195 countries
consequently
there are a plethora of conflicts and misunderstandings among countries. What I mean here is that it is critical to save the country
in a better way for the new generations. One of the major reasons behind that is
to live peacefully, however
, if the country
is in danger citizens must protect it from enemies. A good case in point is to serve the country
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mentally strong by aiming Verb problem
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great
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for great
human-being
attitudes Correct your spelling
human
such
as responsibility and generosity while
the serving period of time.
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On the other hand
, it can also
be argued that the government must pay attention for
the person’s situation. Change preposition
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That is
to say
some people can have serious reasons to not go to compulsory military service. Add a comma
say,
For instance
, the youth’s financial issues, family problems, and the citizen’s health conditions to name but a few.
In conclusion, taking everything mentioned up, the health problems as well as
financial issues play vital role
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the military
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, the government must to
take Change the verb form
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into account. In other words
, the citizens
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The writer addresses both sides of the argument, showing an understanding that compulsory military service can have both benefits and drawbacks.
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