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The maps below show the seaside town of Tendiff as it as it was in 1990 and 2010.

The maps below show the seaside town of Tendiff as it as it was in 1990 and 2010.
These pictures illustrate the beach area of
town
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the town
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 of Tendiff in
two
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 different years
in
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1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, many buildings
are
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were
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 constructed in 2010 that changed the map dramatically. Especially many hotels are built around the beaches to provide better
condition
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conditions
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 for tourists. In 1990, there were no infrastructures on the left
side
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 of the seashore and there were just
two
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 hotels and some buildings on both sides of the Spraymount
road
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. To compare
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two
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the two
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 maps, the ABC
hotel
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, the café, and the fast food restaurant remained unchanged. Around the Spraymount
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road
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Road
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, the Shop and the Arcade buildings changed to the Seafood restaurant and the Supermarket respectively.
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, to construct the new long
road
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 which started from north to south, the Seaview
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hotel
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Hotel
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where
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which
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 was on the
northernwest
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northwest
northern west
 had been demolished. The
road
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 is called Sandhill
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road
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Road
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. To look at the left
side
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 of the figure in 2010, it can be seen that the police station building was built on the north on the left
side
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 of the Sandhill
road
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. To follow
this
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,
two
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hotel
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hotels
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 with names the King
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hotel
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Hotel
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 and the Family
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hotel
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Hotel
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 were erected in sequence on the southern of the police station
along
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alongside
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side
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 the
road
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.
On
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In
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 the southwestern, they put many solar panels in solar farm
area
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areas
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 to save energy from
sun
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the sun
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 and generate
it
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apply
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to
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apply
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electricity.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, side, road, hotel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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