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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the number of
people
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 who migrated temporarily for work in Australia, New Zealand, the UK and the USA in two respective years, 2003 and 2006.
While
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 giving a mean difference in 2006 per 1000
people
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.
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, it is clear from the table that there was an increase in population in 2006 in all four countries.
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 New Zealand has a high number of temporary workers as compared to others. In 2003, Australia had 152,000 job seekers it surged to 219,000 in 2006 and per 1000 it was 10.7. New Zealand showed 65,000
people
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 in 2003 which escalated by 22 per cent in 2006 and per 1000
people
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 21.1. Looking towards the rest of the information, the
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people
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number of people
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 who came to the United Kingdom for jobs were 137,000 in 2003 and 126,000
people
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 rose in 2006
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, per 1000
people
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 4.4 in 2006. The majority number of
people
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 came to America for employment in 2003 577,000 and 678,000 in 2006.
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, per 1000
people
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 recorded 2.3.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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