The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.
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The given line graph provides data on the
consumption
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of four different ingredients, namely chicken, beef, lamb, and fish, in a nation from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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four lines showed fluctuation trends. It is
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worth pointing out that the
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of chicken increased
thorughout
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throughout
the period. Looking at the graph in more detail, all sections of meat
consumption
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experienced fluctuations between 1974 and 2004.
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, we can see the significant trends among these. The figure for beef started at around 200
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and peaked
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250
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, after that it dropped gradually until 100
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in 2004.
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, the figure for lamb had a downward trend from 1979 to 2004.
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the
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of chicken had changed throughout the question period, it experienced a steady
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of approximately 100
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from roughly 150
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in 1974 to 250
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in 2004.
In contrast
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, the figure for fish remained stable over a period of 30 years
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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