The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in Europe country between 1979 and 2004.
The given line graph provides data on the
consumption
of four different ingredients, namely chicken, beef, lamb, and fish, in a nation from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
,
it is clear that
four lines showed fluctuation trends. It is
also
worth pointing out that the
consumption
of chicken increased
thorughout
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throughout
the period. Looking at the graph in more detail, all sections of meat
consumption
experienced fluctuations between 1974 and 2004.
However
, we can see the significant trends among these. The figure for beef started at around 200
grams
and peaked
roughly
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at roughly
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250
grams
, after that it dropped gradually until 100
grams
in 2004.
Moreover
, the figure for lamb had a downward trend from 1979 to 2004.
Although
the
consumption
of chicken had changed throughout the question period, it experienced a steady
increased
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increase
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of approximately 100
grams
from roughly 150
grams
in 1974 to 250
grams
in 2004.
In contrast
, the figure for fish remained stable over a period of 30 years
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