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As the internet becomes more popular, newpapers are becoming a thing of the past. Do what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Day by day, everything changes, and our sorts of information
also
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, that's why now the
internet
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 has chosen more than
newspapers
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. Time passes, and all items are replaced with new and modern ones. These days the most popular of them is the
Internet
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, it can be used to replace many things.
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, a book, a newspaper, a TV, or a way of communication. But now, most of all, it is important for transmitting information. It makes it easy and quick to inform everyone about some news. On the one hand,
this
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 invention is very useful.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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newspapers
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 have been used for many centuries. And in our days almost
in
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apply
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all
countries
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countries,
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it
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is
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 used so people buy it and read news about everything, not only news but
also
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 in
newspapers
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 many games and job
application
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applications
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. Mostly, the older generation
read
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reads
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 from there, maybe because it's difficult for them to use social media. But of course, a new generation
that is
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 not interested in phones or who doesn't have the opportunity to buy phones read
newspapers
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. In conclusion,
newspapers
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 are very useful and used in our days, but the
internet
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prefers
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is
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 easier and quicker so
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internet
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the internet
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 prefers more.

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task response
Try to develop each point further with more specific examples and evidence. For example, discuss particular instances where the internet has impacted newspaper readership.
task response
Aim for clearer, more comprehensive ideas. Some points are introduced but not fully explained or supported.
coherence and cohesion
Work on improving the logical structure. Paragraphs should flow better from one to another, each focusing on a single main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction is clear, but your conclusion is a bit abrupt. Summarize key points to create a more balanced conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Increase the use of cohesive devices (like 'However,' 'In contrast,' 'For instance') to link ideas within and between paragraphs more smoothly.
task response
The essay presents a clear attempt to address the topic and provide an argument.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly states the topic and the writer’s stance.
overall
The language used is generally precise and comprehensible.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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