You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
Given are two graphs concerning the
number
of
phone
subscribers among four countries (namely, Eritrea, India, the United Kingdom and Uruguay) in a ten-year period. The first provides data on the subscriptions to mobile phones,
while
the second indicates the population that
subscribing
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subscribes
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to fixed telephones.
Overall
, it is evident that these nations saw considerable differences in the
number
of people who chose these
phone
services. The
number
of users of cell phones among these four countries increased throughout the decade
while
a declining trend had been shown for landlines. It is apparent from the information supplied that Britain had the highest
number
of mobile
phone
users before 2009. From every British owning one
phone
in 2005, the figure of customers climbed steadily to one-fourth
citizens
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of citizens
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having two phones in 2015. Second in terms of cell
phone
use was Uruguay.
This
country saw a threefold increase during the period in question, from less than 50 people who had a
phone
in 2005 to over 150 in 2015. A similar increase took place in India. The nation with the fewest mobile
phone
users, meanwhile, was Eritrea. It is
also
interesting to note that the usage of fixed telephone was far more common in the UK than in other countries listed. In fact, the prevalence of
landline
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landlines
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in Britain was doubled that of Uruguay. India and Eritrea, meanwhile, had the fewest total of landline subscribers with
mere
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apply
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less than 5 people.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, phone with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • subscriptions
  • mobile phone
  • fixed phone lines
  • trends
  • increases
  • decreases
  • comparisons
  • features
  • noticeable
  • patterns
  • socio-economic factors
  • technological advancements
  • anomalies
  • highest
  • lowest
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