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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
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The bar charts compare the graduate and postgraduate
students
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 who were not employed with full-time
work
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 in terms of what they did after finishing college in the UK in 2008.
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, the most of
students
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 continued their studies and the lowest indicator belonged to the
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 who did voluntary
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. Among the graduate
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, the biggest indicator belonged to the
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 who continued their studies, with
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29,665
students
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. The figure for
students
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 who were not employed was relatively the same as those for
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 who worked part-time, with 16 235
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unemployed and 17 735
students
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 for part-time
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.
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, the
least
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lowest
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 number of
students
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 went to voluntary
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, at 3 500
students
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. Regarding postgraduate
students
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, most
students
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 continued their studies, at almost 2725
students
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. The indicator of part-time worked
students
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 was quite lower than it, at 2535
students
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.
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, approximately 1625
students
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 were not employed.
This
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 figure was nearly 5 times as high as those for voluntarily worked
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. There were 345
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 who went to the voluntary
work
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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