The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1995 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A glance at the graphs
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reveals the relative rate of participation in various
sports
activities, including swimming, team
sports
and gym activities, in a British
sports
club
in a twenty-year period.
Overall
,
club
members' preferences varied throughout the period. It is interesting to note that there
were
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an increased number of
club
members who participated in working out
while
a downward trend had been shown in swimming and team
sports
. It is apparent from the information supplied that the popularity of swimming, which was the most popular sport in 1995, declined substantially over the decade. One in every two people swam in
this
sport
club
in 1995
while
a mere 15 per
cent
of members swam between 2010 and 2015. Gym activities, meanwhile, had an increasing trend from approximately 5 per
cent
in 1995 to somewhere in the vicinity of 28 per
cent
in 2010, followed by a slightly declination to 25 per
cent
in 2015. Team
sports
,
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whereas
, had
moderate
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level of participation and fluctuated between 32 per
cent
, the lowest in 1995 to 40 per
cent
in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, club, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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