The charts below show the percentage of the labour force by occupation in Japan and India in 1960 with projection for 2040.

The charts below show the percentage of the labour force by occupation in Japan and India in 1960 with projection for 2040.
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The line chart illustrates the percentages of the
population
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in Japan, grouped by
age
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since 1960 and prevision to 2040. The general overview is that
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the
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of
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15-64, taking the most proportion among the other
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over the time. It is apparent that the people with 15-64
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old had the highest percentages,
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approximately 65% in 1960. In the following year, the ratio slightly increased to 70%. After that, the percentages of
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fluctuated since 1970. In the next 20
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, the proportion gradually dropped from 70% to just over 50% unfortunately.
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the forecasting, it will
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till 2030 and will gradually rise up to 55% in 2040.
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0-14
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old had a similar trend. By the way, since 1990, the
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has been decreasing till 2040. Surprisingly, for
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people who are more than 65
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old, the
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has continuously increased since the start of the record. Started from 5% of
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the population
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and
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surpassed the
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of 0-14
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old in 2003.
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age
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group
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will be responsible for 35% in 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, group, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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