The chart below show percentage of water used in different sectors in Sydney, Australia in 1977 and 2007.

The chart below show percentage of water used in different sectors in Sydney, Australia in 1977 and 2007.
The pie charts compare portions of
water
used in various sections in Sydney and Australia in 1997 and 2007.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Sydneysiders and Australian people spent the largest proportion of
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water
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food
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industry
and
lowest
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proportion used
on
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building
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industry
in 1997 and 2007. In 1997, the greatest proportion of spending
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was on the food
industry
, which represented 48% of the total expenditure and
2007
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it was slightly lower, at 41%. In terms of the service
industry
, in 1997 people spent 13% of
water
and
2007
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it was almost doubled, at 25%. Sydneysiders and Australian people spent
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water
for manufacturing, at 5% in 1997 and it
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moderately declined,
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2% in 2007. Regarding
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household uses, the total expenditure was just 19% in 1997 and the figure for
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category
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slowly increased,
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21% in 2007.
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manufacturing for both years were relatively similar, at 15% in 1997 and 11% in 2007.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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  • water consumption
  • percent
  • sector
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • agriculture
  • comparison
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • significant
  • resource management
  • sustainability
  • efficiency
  • conservation
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