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The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Maps
depicts
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depict
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 how public
park
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parks
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 develop from 1920
untill
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until
 now.
overall
, we see many dramatic changes in
map
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the map
a map
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 for
present
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a present
the present
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 time by adding
number
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a number
the number
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 of
feature
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features
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 for
recreation
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the recreation
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 part or
ameliorate
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ameliorating
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cultural
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the cultural
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 side.
To begin
 with,
stage
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the stage
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 for musicians
alter
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was altered
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to
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into
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amphitheater
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an amphitheater
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 for
concert
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concerts
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 and events. rose gardens
remove
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removed
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 from some
part
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parts
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 of
park
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the park
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 and relocated
in
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into
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centeral
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central
park
 with
demolished
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a demolished
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 fountain surrounded with seats and one rose
gaeden
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garden
build
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built
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 in
noth
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the
 west maps. Opened cafe and
childern
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children
children's
play ground
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playground
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 by
remove
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removing
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 pond for plants and rose garden in
noth
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north
 east of
park
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the park
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,
afterward
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afterwards
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 establish water feature by
destory
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destroy
 greenhouse in
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the south
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south east
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south-east
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 of
park
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the park
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. In
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one
ne
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ne,
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 design
add
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adds
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 other entrance underground car par in
south
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the south
a south
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park
 of
park
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the park
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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