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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1
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The table chart illustrates data about the rate of the 4 different hobbies namely reading, animated play, playing and photography of the adults
people live
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living
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 in
city
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the city
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 and village in 1990 and 2010.
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, it can be easily seen that the total proportion of
the
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apply
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photography and animated play
were
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was
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 the lowest in 1990 and
in
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apply
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2010 respectively. It is observed that the most popular activity was reading for both time and area.
However
, the rate of reading for adults who live in rural
place
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places
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slightly
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was slightly
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 higher than
urban
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in urban
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places'
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places
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71
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at 71
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% and 61% respectively in 1990 but these rates were exactly the same in 2010
by
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at
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 78%. The preferences
of
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for
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the
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apply
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playing in cities
drop
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dropped
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 to 14%
although
this
 activity
rate's
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rates
rate
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 was
stabile
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stable
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 in villages by 26%.
However
, the percentage of adults in urban and rural
place
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places
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 who
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are interest
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interest
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interested
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with
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in
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 photography remarkably increased to 14% and 24% namely in the given period.
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